Above is MadisonWoods Friday Fictioneers, 100-word photo prompt titled: MY SITTING-SPOT- 2/17/12. Below is my 100-word story.
HER SITTING SPOT
Every spring, she visited her secret summer haven. April showers swept away depressing, dead leaves, giving birth to lush velvet greenery and delicate wildflowers. Her secluded sitting spot. A large rock and a mirror-clear, mellow brook. A lullaby of comfort to escape from forced field work, harsh, unforgiving sun, a chaotic, clamorous home and...him.
Drifting in melancholy thought, dreaming, praying. Sailing on the breeze, soft moccasin footprints. Native Spirit of the Ages whispers into her ear. "Be patient, my child. Be brave. I see what you cannot. Your future will be lifted with light and song and you will shine."
Ooh, Lora, nice job! I want a serene sitting spot like that! Nice touch about the Native Spirit at the end. Both mysterious and comforting.
ReplyDeleteI'm still thinking about what to write. Soon!
Hi Beth: I read your Tommy story. Loved it.
ReplyDeleteDear Lora,
ReplyDeleteI'm sorry it took so long for me to make my way to your story. The ending was lovely as was your description throughout. The native Spirit whispered to her what it whispers to me. I liked that.
Aloha,
Doug
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This was a sweet read. Calm and gentle. I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing
ReplyDeleteI thought this piece was so comforting and uplifting. I really enjoyed reading it!
ReplyDeleteHi Lora,
ReplyDeleteBeautiful and inspirational writing in this story. You get the award of the week for fabulous descriptive writing. Thanks for your nice comments on my work.
Wonderful emotion filled words full of intospection. I was easily able to visualize not only the location outside but inside.
ReplyDeleteNice imagery. I like the positive note at the end. "...and you will shine." is lovely.
ReplyDeleteVery serene and comforting. The "and him" line tells us so much and opens up so many questions. I'm glad the Native Spirit is with her, there's hope in those lines.
ReplyDeleteTo Beth, Doug, CC, Threedescriptors, Bridges..., Teschoenborn, W. Both Sides and Elmo. Thank you for your wonderful comments. This is such an excellent writing exercise. (Thank you Madison). I often go over the word count then pare it down to 100 words...and get rid of "my unecessary darlings."
ReplyDeleteThis is a very comforting piece. Very optimistic.
ReplyDeleteI loved the first paragraph.. Beautiful choice of words. I could see it all come to life as I read it..
Hi Parul: Pleased to know you found my piece comforting and optimistic. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteLora -- this is lovely. I think you evoke the sense of the photo with apparent effortlessness, making for a really pleasant read. Good work!
ReplyDeleteHi Lime: Thank you for your warm compliments. The story evolved effortlessly once I understood the young girl's plight.
ReplyDeleteSorry that I'm running late with comments--busy weekend and MANY wonderful stories to read. I love this exercise. Your story was poetic in its beauty--I loved the reference to her need for solitude from "him." Would love to peek farther into her need for the peaceful place. Thanks for sharing--it was lovely.
ReplyDeleteHi Palooski65 ~ Thank you for your lovely commments which continue to touch my heart. I've been searching...where can I find you? Also, don't apologize. I'm playing catch up myself with so many wonderful stories. I joined 3 stories back and like you...LOVE these exercizes. Thanks to Madison.
ReplyDeleteI'm running behind too! Loved the hope offered in your story and I can identify with the narrator's need to find escape from life's difficulty, especially have known the desire to find time away from 'him'.
ReplyDeleteHi Madison: Thank you for your warm comments. Most of all, thank you for your wonderful photo prompts and giving us the opportunity to share our 100-word stories on Friday Fictioneers.
DeleteSo poetic and full of alliteration. This was definitely my favorite line: " A large rock and a mirror-clear, mellow brook."
ReplyDeleteHi Steven: Thank you for taking the time to share your uplifting thoughts and comments.
DeleteLove the spiritual aspects of the first paragraph and the real aspects of the second.
ReplyDeleteThank you Robin. Your viewpoint and the way of looking at it is interesting.
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