Friday, August 31, 2012

AS SHE PICTURED IT.



Madison Woods FridayFictioneers photo prompt courtesy of Stacy Plowright's photo (copyright) titled: Clouds in Toronto. Below is my 100-word story inspired by Stacy's lovely photo. 8/31/12.

                         *** AS SHE PICTURED IT ***

"Beautiful." She whispers with labored breath.
"What's beautiful?"
"Exactly as I pictured it." 
"Pictured what, mother?"
"Look up." She points a bony, arthritic finger toward the window. "Layers of clouds swirling around a golden chariot with majestic white horses. Playful, pixie cherubs in wispy pink. Feathery wings, fluttering, shielding His face. Glorious, divine harp music.. Can you hear, son?"
"Yes, mother."
She rests her head back and smiles. "It means Israel rebuilt the third temple in Jerusalem in time for His return."
"Shall I close the blinds, sir? 
"Not necessary, nurse. She's been blind since the stroke five years ago."

32 comments:

  1. Lora, this one is simply stunning! I think the mother has a com-link. Love it!
    mine's here: http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2012/08/31/writers-catharsis/

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    1. Hi Rockstar ~ Mother knows her Bible, that's for sure. Thanks for visiting.

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  2. wonderful! You don't need eyes or ears all the time.

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    1. Might we all be that lucky to have that vision when it's our time. Thanks for visiting. On my way to yours.

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  3. Very stirring!
    Wonderful how a belief drives one! Very good! :)

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  4. Dear Lora,

    A heartfelt piece with a subtle twist of time's dagger at the end. i enjoyed your story very much.

    Aloha,

    Doug

    http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/08/31/satisfaction-brought-them-back/

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    1. Aloha Doug ~ Glad you enjoyed it. Tks for visiting. On my way to yours soon.

      Lora

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  5. That hint of sadness (or something like sadness, anyway)at the end sells the whole thing. Nicely done.

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    1. Hi...Depends on how you view it. Sad for the son, peace and joy for the mother. Tks for visiting. On my way to yours soon.

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  6. What a beautiful story, Lora. Even with a stroke, blind and deaf, she is able to hear the sounds of heaven, see the face of God's son, and know the prophetic events coming and gone. Very vivid images.

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    1. Thank you Jem. Not a bad way to pass from one dimension to the next. Will visit you soon.

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  7. Very creative take. I didn't see the Messianic picture either, but your character did.

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    1. Hi Thanks for stopping by. Will visit you soon.

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  8. Ow, this is so touching and poignant. I did not expect that twist. Well done. http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/08/31/friday-fictioneers-harmattan-rain/

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    1. Hi Celestine ~ Thank you for your comments. Will see yo
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  9. There's so much going on here, I want to read it again and again to take away the story behind the story. The mother's words are vivid and beautiful; if she's dying it's a great way to go.
    I'm over here - http://elmowrites.wordpress.com/2012/08/31/friday-fiction-white-pegasi/

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    1. Hi Elmo: Thank you for your lovely comments and yes, that is her vision as she is dying. On my way to yours soon.

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  10. This fit in with something I just saw (again) on Inspector Lewis, where the man's wife was in a coma, not expected to come out of it, and he was staying with her, reading and talking to her because he'd heard of someone who'd come out of a coma and talked of the frustration of being mentally alive but not being able to convey anything to anyone else. I feel this woman's either frustrated or happy because this is all in her head and that's all that's in her head. But of course, I could be wrong and no one's even reading this. :-)

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  11. Hi Janet...I'm not familiar with Inspector Lewis, but I stayed at my mom's bedside while she was in a coma for 8 days. To answer your question..the vision my character has gives her peace, joy and serenity. Tks for visiting. On my way to yours soon.

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  12. Thank you Boomie. Visiting you soon.

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  13. A very sad, but beautiful story of one with such prophetic insight. Although she was blind and deaf and suffered from a stroke she was hearing the sounds of heaven, and seeing God's son and knowing the events foretold, events yet to come. The woman saw very vivid, clear images of Heaven's realm and the face of Jesus. All of those we will experience one day.

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  14. Hi Jemj... Thank you once again for your lovely and thoughtful comments.

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  15. sad, but glorious, very nicely done

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  16. Hi Bill: Tks for commenting. On my way to yours soon.

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  17. Sad for her son - but seems she has a glimpse of her hereafter . Well done

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    1. HI Antonia: Let's hope it manifests for us as well. Tks for visiting.

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  18. Personally, I find this a very comforting piece. My Dad was comatose for 9 days before passing. This would be a beautiful thing to see as one makes the transition. Well done.

    thanks for the comment on mine. Moving to Wordpress has been like eating left-handed. It's awkard right now, but I think I'm going to like it once I get used to it.

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    1. HiRussell: Happy my story resonated with you. Tks for visting.

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  19. A wonderful story, well told. Sometimes we truly do have to be blind to really see. Love it!

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    1. Hi Red: Thanks for stopping by.

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