Friday, June 15, 2012

WOODED PATH


Above is Madison Wood's Friday Fictioneers photo prompt titled: PATH (6/15/12)


Below is my 100-word story inspired by Madison's beautiful photo.


                                    **** WOODED PATH ****


We hadn't seen each other since childhood and chatted lightly; reminiscing; while strolling along a wooded path. Now, in his mid-twenties, he was tall with movie star looks, a solid athletic physique, thick, tousled, sun-kissed hair, a Cary Grant dimple in his square chin, sensitive eyes and a killer smile. His jughead ears were no more. 


He stopped abruptly, placed his hands on my face, opened his heart and all in one breath, said he loved me, proposed marriage and if I refused, he would become a priest. Secretly engaged to his cousin, I was rendered speechless.
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59 comments:

  1. AnonymousJune 15, 2012 at 3:46 AM

    Wow! Where's this one going? So many questions! Want to know what happens! Mine's here: http://marilynkaydennis.wordpress.com/madison-woods-friday-fictioneers-witch

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    1. LoraJune 15, 2012 at 5:39 AM

      Hi...Tks for stopping by from Australia. Left you a comment earlier.

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  2. Joanna (Lazuli Portals)June 15, 2012 at 4:48 AM

    Uh-oh: "It's complicated!" I wonder how this turns out...
    Here's mine: http://www.lazuli-portals.com/flash-fiction/expect-the-unexpected

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    1. LoraJune 15, 2012 at 5:05 AM

      Hi Joanna ... Thks for visiting. will have to keep everybody guessing as to how it works out. On my way to yours.

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  3. AnonymousJune 15, 2012 at 5:08 AM

    Oh dear that is complicated and I now wonder if she secretly loves him too.

    Here's mine for this week: http://womanontheedgeofreality.com/2012/06/15/friday-fictioneers-visiting-grannys/

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    1. LoraJune 15, 2012 at 5:41 AM

      HI...Hm...getting some interesting comments and questions. Thanks for stopping by.

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  4. AnonymousJune 15, 2012 at 5:09 AM

    Very complicated and well written. Here's mine: http://womanontheedgeofreality.com/2012/06/15/friday-fictioneers-visiting-grannys/

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  5. AnonymousJune 15, 2012 at 5:21 AM

    oh no! What will she do now....he would be so disappointed....

    http://writersclubkl.wordpress.com/2012/06/15/friday-fictioneers-do-not-follow-me-home/

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  6. LoraJune 15, 2012 at 5:30 AM

    Hi: She is in a pickle, isn't she? Tks for stopping by.

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  7. AnonymousJune 15, 2012 at 5:32 AM

    very nice, indeed! i like childhood sweethearts....they remind me of something haha....here's mine! http://writeforacause.org/2012/06/15/friday-fictioneers-one-road-two-souls/

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  8. LoraJune 15, 2012 at 5:47 AM

    Hi Jenine.... Hm...wonder what they remind you of...??? Thanks for stopping by. On my way to yours soon.

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  9. Douglas MacIlroyJune 15, 2012 at 6:08 AM

    Dear Lora,

    I seem to be in an 'input' mode this early morning in Hawaii. Your first sentence is distracting and might work better as follows, "We hadn't seen each other since childhood and chatted lightly; reminiscing while strolling along a wooded path." Please forgive my presumption if you are not one of those that like said input.

    I think, since she is not yet married, that she should....

    (never mind:)

    Lovely story.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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    1. LoraJune 16, 2012 at 1:05 AM

      Hi Doug: Thanks for your input. I had not noticed that the first sentence was awkward and distracting. Wonder why no one else mentioned it...however...rereading it, I see your point, and will change it. I appreciate the critique. Actually, at first I had her secretly engaged to his brother, but that was too tricky...so she got engaged to his cousin instead. I will let the readers decide how she deals with this predicament. Doing down the Link List...will get to you soon.

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  10. Rochelle Wisoff-FieldsJune 15, 2012 at 6:19 AM

    Now there's a situation! Nicely done! I haven't posted quite yet.

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    1. LoraJune 16, 2012 at 1:08 AM

      Hi Rochelle: Thks for visiting. Isn't this Link List terrific?

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  11. Rochelle Wisoff-FieldsJune 15, 2012 at 6:52 AM

    Okay, whenever my comments show up here's my story. http:www.rochelle-wisoff.blogspot.com/2012/06/mothers-gift.html

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    1. LoraJune 16, 2012 at 1:07 AM

      Going down the list...will get to yours soon.

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  12. Kaitlin BranchJune 15, 2012 at 8:07 AM

    You got me! That was great! Hahaha, I can only imagine the sense of confusion and faint horror.

    Here's mine. http://kaitlinandmichaelbranch.com/2012/06/15/friday-fictioneers-7/

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    1. LoraJune 16, 2012 at 1:16 AM

      Hi Kaitlin: Tks for visiting. In fact, I almost had her fainting at the end but figured that would have been a bit too dramatic. LOL. Going down the list.

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  13. AnonymousJune 15, 2012 at 8:30 AM

    This seems like there's more to the story. I hope she figures out what to do!

    Thanks for reading mine! http://wp.me/p1Wqon-aA

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    1. LoraJune 16, 2012 at 1:18 AM

      Hi Erin...there is/was more to the story but I'll let the readers decide the outcome.

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  14. Reading PleasureJune 15, 2012 at 8:57 AM

    You've rendered me speechless here too. Beautiful. Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/06/15/fridayfictioneers-sacrilege/

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    1. LoraJune 16, 2012 at 1:19 AM

      Hi RPleasure. Tks for visiting. Going down the list ... will read yours shortly.

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  15. AnonymousJune 15, 2012 at 8:57 AM

    Hi! It's been a while for me, since I had a lot of family responsibilities to take care of, but it's good to be back!

    Nice description - I love the "jughead ears" sentence! (The photo also blends nicely with your blog background!)

    I'm on the link system, or here:
    http://kbnelson.wordpress.com/2012/06/14/friday-flash-fiction-hot-water/

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    1. LoraJune 16, 2012 at 1:23 AM

      Hi Karen: Welcome back !!! Nice to see you again. I changed the template a few days before Madison posted the photo...I'm also amazed at how well it blends. Tks for reading and commenting. Going down the list..will read yours shortly. PS: Isn't this new link system terrific...? Thanks to Madison for setting it up.

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  16. Karen NelsonJune 15, 2012 at 9:00 AM

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  17. Sandra CrookJune 15, 2012 at 10:29 AM

    I think the clergyhood is about to see a new recruit. Nicely done.

    http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/06/15/given-a-choice-friday-fictioneers-june-2012/

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    1. LoraJune 16, 2012 at 1:28 AM

      Hi Sandra: Ahhh...well...since there is more to the story, I am happy to report that the clergyhood never got their hooks into this new recruit. LOL. Tks for visiting. Going down the link list.

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  18. AnonymousJune 15, 2012 at 10:43 AM

    Oh my goodness! My jaw totally dropped at the end. Very, very well done!! Here's mine: http://theforgottenwife.com/2012/06/15/friday-fictioneers-6152012-the-watcher/

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    1. LoraJune 16, 2012 at 1:30 AM

      Hi there...lol,,,loved your reaction to the end. Tks for stopping by. Going down the list...

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  19. UnknownJune 15, 2012 at 4:00 PM

    She's been put in such a difficult position. I really feel for her.

    Mine's here: http://logo-ligi.com/2012/06/15/six-oclock/

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    1. LoraJune 16, 2012 at 1:34 AM

      HI Logo: Tks for visiting. I'm hoping my readers will feel for him as well. Working down the list..will read yours shortly.

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  20. Palooski65June 16, 2012 at 1:04 AM

    Well, I guess I'm sorta bringing up the tail on yours. :-) I can only add "ditto" to the comments that have been given and tell you that I enjoyed it.

    Thank you for commenting on mine.

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    1. LoraJune 17, 2012 at 3:24 AM

      Hi Palooski: Glad you enjoyed my story and tks for stopping by.

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  21. AnonymousJune 16, 2012 at 5:03 AM

    as my kids often said "what happens next?"
    You have piqued my curiosity.
    Thanks for stoppong by http://oldentimes.wordpress.com/2012/06/14/fridat-fictioneers/

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    1. LoraJune 17, 2012 at 3:23 AM

      Hi oldentimes: Who knows? Depending on future prompts, maybe I can fit in a sequel. Tks for visiting.

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  22. AnonymousJune 16, 2012 at 6:53 AM

    Surprise! Loved it! Thanks for coming by http://oldentimes.wordpress.com/2012/06/14/fridat-fictioneers/

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    1. LoraJune 17, 2012 at 3:22 AM

      Hi Oldentimes: Thanks for stopping by and commenting.

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  23. UnknownJune 16, 2012 at 7:49 AM

    Nice twist there, never saw that coming.

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    1. LoraJune 17, 2012 at 3:20 AM

      Hi Brandon: Surprise endings are fun. Thanks for stopping by.

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  24. ElaineJune 16, 2012 at 9:00 AM

    That's one complicated story. What on earth is she going to say? Great job.

    And for your readers here's mine
    http://tollykitsjourney.wordpress.com/2012/06/15/a-walk-in-the-woods-fridayfictioneers-flashfiction/

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    1. LoraJune 17, 2012 at 3:19 AM

      Hi Elaine: I put her in some dilemma, eh? lol. Thanks for stopping by.

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  25. AnonymousJune 17, 2012 at 2:17 AM

    Oh no... Speechless indeed. Simple stroytelling. Very Nice. I like! :)
    Thanks for coming by Nifti's Book and leaving suggestions :)

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  26. LoraJune 17, 2012 at 3:18 AM

    Hi Nifti...Thanks for stopping by and commenting. See you next week.

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  27. AnonymousJune 17, 2012 at 4:46 AM

    Ah, nicely done :)

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  28. AnonymousJune 17, 2012 at 7:56 AM

    Wow...talk about being ambushed! Nicely told - you set the situation up by telling us how attractive he is, and then turn it around completely. (Though I guess it would make sense for his cousin to be handsome too - runs in the family??)

    Thanks for commenting on my story! (http://newpillowbook.wordpress.com/2012/06/15/friday-fictioneers-a-walk-in-the-woods/).

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    1. LoraJune 17, 2012 at 6:38 PM

      Hi Pillowbook: I'll keep you guessing. Both handsome, yes...but which one has the most sex appeal and which one ends up winning her heart? Hm.... Tks for stopping by.

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  29. AnonymousJune 17, 2012 at 11:40 AM

    No pressure! This could go romance or tragedy or, from the expression I'm imagining on her face, screwball comedy from the turning point of this dilemma. So many possibilities from one quick glimpse!

    Thanks for stopping by and Happy Sunday,
    Kathy

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    1. LoraJune 17, 2012 at 6:35 PM

      Hi Kathy: Love the possibilities you gave her. The screwball comedy idea made me chuckle. Kudos for the best comments this week.

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  30. Derek OsedachJune 17, 2012 at 3:08 PM

    Sounds like she's in quite the pickle! Makes me wonder which route she'll take: doom the guy to becoming a priest, or doom herself to becoming a heartbreaker! Either way, she's got it rough.

    http://practicallyserious.com/2012/06/15/friday-fiction…ggest-backyard/

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  31. LoraJune 17, 2012 at 6:32 PM

    Hi Derek: Yes, she's in a pickle for sure. Thanks for stopping by.

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  32. AnonymousJune 19, 2012 at 7:38 AM

    Sweet little story with a nice "keep 'em guessing" ending.

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  33. LoraJune 20, 2012 at 12:55 AM

    Hi Hugmore: How nice of you to visit and thank you for your lovely comment to my sweet little story.

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  34. AnonymousJune 21, 2012 at 12:37 PM

    Wow you have thrown this wide open - I love it, please write some more!

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  35. AnonymousJune 21, 2012 at 9:22 PM

    Oh dear, I think she has a decision to make.....nice story!

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  36. Sketching GirlJune 26, 2012 at 2:51 PM

    This is great! Personally, I've no idea what the cousin is like, but from this piece alone - I would marry him! Great description! :)

    My Revision - http://writing-in-the-woods.blogspot.co.uk/2012/06/friday-fictioneers-in-woods-revision.html

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  37. AnonymousJuly 12, 2012 at 1:44 PM

    "like"
    :)

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